Thursday, October 7, 2010

Barrier

Like all others
there is
a strength from within
I refuse to lose
I refuse to die.

I adapt to turmoil
I adapt to peace
I refuse to be idle
I refuse not knowing.

Constant changes
but I remain the same
constant thinking
but I remain silent
I refuse to share.

I allow privileges
I deny access
I dont stand alone
I refuse to lose
I refuse to die.

Give me feedback on what you think. Thanks. Its for English1102 ;)

17 comments:

  1. wow thats really good. do you write alot. post some more!

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  2. You've made some interesting points... I also have some points (actually bubbles) on Enhanced by MS Paint :)

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  3. thanks all :) yeah thats completely about me, and missing some things too im sure

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  4. Really good poem.. Thoroughly enjoyed it.. Makes me feel a little depressed though D:

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  5. Hmm, not too bad, but starting off half the lines with I kind of dulls it a little.

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  6. I must admit
    That's pretty neat
    Keep it up!
    give me a wassup
    and i'll be back!

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  7. >Hmm, not too bad, but starting off half the lines with I kind of dulls it a little.

    Needs some variety.

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  8. I honestly, don't know what to think.

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